The comparison between 2 generations
When I was a child, my mom used to tell me about her childhood, her dream, her passion and how she was living, how hard it was that my mom needed to try to get a job although she was so young at that time.
My mom’s childhood was not easy. My grandparents were very impoverished and had a hard time to keep a family. They had been working so hard to have enough money to take care of all 10 people in the family. My mom knew that the only one thing to help her and her family to get out of this poverty was be a good student and then she could get a good salary. Then, she was not only a top student in her class but also a hard worker. Although my grandfather really loved her and he didn’t want her to work or do anything except her study, my mom still wanted to help him. Therefore, she was hired to work as a dishwasher or clothing-washer. After school, she also biked a long distance to sell my grandmother’s cakes.
My grandparents didn’t have enough money to buy food for the family. Therefore, instead of having three meals a day, they had only one and a snack, such as a cheap vegetable.
No matter how tough the life was, my mom was still the best student in her school and the only one in the family who could graduate. Furthermore, she even could go forward to the University.
In contrast, I was born when our family had already become easier and I do not have to work hard or do anything to earn money except studying and being a obedient girl. I have three meals a day, further, I can have any cookies or candy that I want. But beside that, I need to study very hard as my mom did. That’s why I’m here, in
In conclusion, my childhood was much better than my mom’s childhood. On the other hand, I don’t see it as my pride, I see it as the lesson of life that my mom wants me to know, and from that I can do everything better than her.
4 comments:
Hi~ judy. How is it going? I read your post that is about your mom's childhood. Your mom is totally great parent.And I believe you will be like your mom. However you have to remember you must study for yourself, not your mom. You are a great student and will reach your dream. I believe it.
Study hard, and take care.
Good luck to you, and all of well
Jodi- Nice work rewriting!
Some corrections and suggestions:
-avoid repeating words in the title (childhood). Instead say something like, “The Childhoods of My Mother and I”. Even better, be more specific –what about your childhoods? (Contrasting)
-Run on sentence: “My mom knew that there was only one thing to help her and her family to get out of this poverty was be a good student and then she could get a good salary.” Change to : My mom knew that there was only one thing to help her and her family to get out of this poverty; THIS WAS TO be a good student and then she could get a good salary. OR: My mom knew THAT THE ONLY THING to help her and her family to get out of this poverty was be a good student and then she could get a good salary.
- “…my grandfather really loved her and he didn’t want her to work or DO anything…”
-“…the only one in the family WHO could graduate.”
-“…I was born when our family HAD already become…”
-“ON the other hand,…”
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